【原创文学】To my Fantastic Dream(6)
Only in one’s dream can he be truly free,

Why I dreamed so hard but still can not fly to thee?

Peering at thee from the distant apogee,

Deep sorrow makes me sick and I wanna flee.



Mad, Sad and abandoned as me,

Illusion is no difference than a killing barley-bree.

That’s why I decided to forget it indeed

But, before I tear off all these,

Let me write down some lines

To the Fantastic dreams of a KID.
[固守逃兵 (1-13 0:16, Long long ago)] [ 传统版 | sForum ][登录后回复]1楼

i have two questions1. why you wrote "wanna"? does it mean want to do something?
2. in english poems, do i need to follow the same ending style strickly as you did? for instance, you used words like "free thee apogee flee " , "seal deal real" ...[何假尾 (1-17 10:48, Long long ago)] [ 传统版 | sForum ][登录后回复]2楼

(引用 何假尾:i have two questions1. why you wrote "wanna"? does it mean want to do something? 2. in english poems, do i need to follow the s...)1. If I'm not wrong,wanna = want to, in American english. I use it simply due to personal preference.

2. Ending the sentence with words having the same vowel is another personal preferance which inherited from Chinese poetry. I use it simply to make the poet more rhythmic and sounds cute. There is no such rules. Acctually when U search google for english poetries, as what I did, U will find many english poetry are not rhythmic at all....[固守逃兵 (1-18 15:53, Long long ago)] [ 传统版 | sForum ][登录后回复]3楼

this red club is awarded to the entire poemgood try and keep it up! ^_^[晖兰 (1-21 17:13, Long long ago)] [ 传统版 | sForum ][登录后回复]4楼

(引用 晖兰:this red club is awarded to the entire poemgood try and keep it up! ^_^)谢谢斑竹，说句肉麻的： 这是我收到的最好的过年礼。 ：）[固守逃兵 (1-22 15:30, Long long ago)] [ 传统版 | sForum ][登录后回复]5楼