最后一次请英语强人帮忙啦！麻烦大家啦！这篇是基本在45分钟写完的 我基本就是这个水平 考过GRE的能不能给点评价（比如说大概能得的分数）
和意见啊！
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We usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own; disagreements can cause stress and inhibit learning.
My response:
For some people, a lot may be drawn from people whose views share with them; for others, in contrast, they tend to believe that they learn much more from people who disagrees with them. As far as I'm concerned, I'm in favor of the idea that we learn much more from people whose views contradict our own in that disagreements not only lead us to make further reflection on a specific problem and thus arrive at more accurate conclusions but also equip us with different and comprehensive perspectives of a matter.
In the first place, people who disagree with us effectively motivate us to meditate over a matter and hel (more...)
My two-cent suggestions
I just had a brief look. I would like to share my views here.
The structure is there. Opening, Body and Conclusion. Very good. It's well structured and planned. It would be better if you can use some personal examples as illustration. You may want to apply PREP check. Point (introduction) - Reason - Example - Point (conclusion).It is very important. Someone may not have a proper closing at all and he would have to pay the price at the end of the day.
However, I find it a bit hard to read your text. Why? You write very long sentences. Try to keep is short. Apply KISS in this case. Keep It Short/Simple yet Sharp! Do NOT use very complicated sentences. You may find simple lines helpful and striking. No point to beat around the bushes. Wouldn't it be better to reach the destination via short cuts? After all, the most important thing is to get the message across. Too much decoration sometimes can be negative.
Overall, it is a well drafted essay.
(Just some of the personal thoughts. You may not take it seriously. May you have the luck in your GRE test. By the way, I have no experiences on GRE essay writings at all.)
The structure is there. Opening, Body and Conclusion. Very good. It's well structured and planned. It would be better if you can use some personal examples as illustration. You may want to apply PREP check. Point (introduction) - Reason - Example - Point (conclusion).It is very important. Someone may not have a proper closing at all and he would have to pay the price at the end of the day.
However, I find it a bit hard to read your text. Why? You write very long sentences. Try to keep is short. Apply KISS in this case. Keep It Short/Simple yet Sharp! Do NOT use very complicated sentences. You may find simple lines helpful and striking. No point to beat around the bushes. Wouldn't it be better to reach the destination via short cuts? After all, the most important thing is to get the message across. Too much decoration sometimes can be negative.
Overall, it is a well drafted essay.
(Just some of the personal thoughts. You may not take it seriously. May you have the luck in your GRE test. By the way, I have no experiences on GRE essay writings at all.)
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